All Comments on 'A Christmas Party Surprise'

Get an editor. The missing and misused words were too distracting to get past the first two paragraphs.

2 single people, why are they fucking only in the office when they both have their own rooms? FTDS, wish you were here. Smirked loudly? Author attempting to get all the standard shit into the story, pity so much of it is used inappropriately. 37 stories from this author? Are they all this wretched?

This ending made no sense unless you intend to continue this story.

It helps to be literate and possess a realistically broad vocabulary before you try to write.

You need to indicate when yours is part of a series.

Odd little tale. Could be good if you hadn’t stopped there and you’d sorted the errors…

Needs more