All Comments on 'A Conversion Ch. 02'

The first part of the story was great describing the furs the two "converted" women and the wonderfull sex. But the story I thought was building to a climax, so it was confusing when you say well you can imagine the rest. That was the part the whole story was supposed to be building to! It could have been so much hotter. The sex with darcie and karen was described so well and was very HOT so I was waiting for what I though would be the Grand Finale. I thought with the last girl Heather you would describe her trasformation into loving fur but you just dropped off like you got bored. There were so many thing to work with the soft fur on her muscular body firm thighs, six pack abs, firm ass, ect. Did you blow your load too quickly. Pull out your lube or fur and rewrite the end.

I think you're right.

I was getting tired but moreover I just couldn't think of a good way to end it. I felt like it was just going to be more of the same thing over and over again. I just cut it off at the end.

I've been thinking about what to do. I believe I've got a good climax to the story. (Literally and figuratively.)

I will rewrite the ending and resubmit in the next few days.

Thanks for your input! It does make a difference!

I otherwise love your stories. You write very well. I wasn't meaning to be too critical it's just there was an expectation of the ending. A couple of suggestions if I may describe heathers muscular body, girls with muscular bodys are a really sexy. Her flat tummy, or six pack abs, the strong arms part were a good start. How about a part where she holds him with her muscular legs and makes him continue to pleasure her in the furs! My sort of idea is write about how he converts her from her peta ideology to his "furry ideology". How she resists but the fur rubbed on her taut body keeps giving her sexy thoughts and feelings and awakens feelings for men she never knew she had. Mabey turns her bi? Or she pinions him to the bed and puts a cock ring on or uses ice to numb and furs him till he can't take anymore and makes him promise to be with their fur family forever before he can cum? Mabey too much but I'll throw this last idea out how about the muscular girl ties him up while the other two girls continually fur every part of his body and the muscular girl in return for making her bi shows him how to have the ultimate orgasm. being a legman I can imagine him admiring her smooth muscular legs she wraps one of her legs aound one of his to keep him from kicking and with a plastic glove she lubes up and fingers his ass giving him the worlds best prostate message making him leak cum all over a fur piece telling him how sexy it is and how she's going to wear is aginst her skin all the while he is spurting out cum but not relieving the presure like a real orgasm. Just watching his cum drench her legs and the fur piece. finally when he's had enough she stops and uses the fur and her legs to bring him to the most powerfull orgasm he's ever had. Just some ideas love your work you write awesome stories love them all! Keep it up. By the way if you don't know anything about prostate message there are some stories on this site about them search "milking" my favorite stories are writen by a person by the name of "Kessler" they are "First time milking" or "Milking for the first time" or "Milked by three" just so you know if you want to go that route. I thought the power exchange shared by the two powerfull personalities would be cool. Later. Sorry this is long you can erase after you read.

No, galianos, I don't think you were too harsh.

You were right on target! I DID cop out on the climax. I thought I was being clever but all I really did was let down the reader and even insult him/her a bit, saying he/she had a "horny little mind".

I am in the middle of a rewrite as we speak. I think you're going to find it interesting, to say the least.

I wrote most of it before I read your second comment so I didn't get a chance to put in much of what you asked for but I will go back and throw in a splash of "color" here and there, just for you. After all, you are the one who got the ball rolling again! :)

BTW: No, I do not usually delete comments unless they are from trolls or spammers. I try to give honest criticism the respect it deserves, even if I don't agree with it.

Thanks again for taking the time to write!

I'll try to send up a flare when the rewrite is published.

fantastic,,better make that a 48hr hardon.....i'd settle for one of them,,,,eeney,meeny,miney,furrrrrrrr....*BG*

Furry Justice prevails and they all wallow in the furs happily and contentedly. FurLove