All Comments on 'A Day at the Beach Ch. 01'

by The_Darkness

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Decent if this was your first attempt, but it's got it's issues. MC has apparently known his sister's friends since they were 14, so at least four years, and yet he doesn't know their names? Either this guy's ignorant as fuck, or just stupid. Also, is he older or younger than his sister? You introduced him as if he were a high school student, yet his sister is the 18yo senior. .

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

When might we get new chapters.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
sounds like a bottle id like to get my hands on

If only dreams could come true. Id love to stumble on a potion that could help me get amongst this.......thanks very much! So where and what does Dan do now?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Loved it!

I can't wait for the next installment! So hot!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Good start

Hoping the next installment includes more mc victims.

rachlourachlouover 17 years ago
Interesting story ~

and very HOT! Looking forward to reading the next installments!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Great story

Great writing I liked the plot. Keep it going

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