All Comments on 'A First Night Pt. 01'

I found it a little ruff around the edges.

I liked the premise, think you could of given more details - more the better but thats simply my personal taste. It felt a little crushed...

I dont know if the idea was to follow-up with chapter 2, I think you should and I'd like to read.

It'd be nice to explore this character, him becoming someone he didn't know he could be, wanting to please her and her desires.

Josie : )