All Comments on 'A Gift of a Special Website Pt. 01'

As soon as you bash president trump I was done with your story. It may have been good but that was unnecessary.

The list of the cast of characters is not only unnecessary but useless as the names mean nothing until the characters appear in the story. There are a lot of technical errors of punctuation, and some stilted, unnatural dialogue. In casual conversation, English speakers don't say, "I am excited.." or "it is great" etc. They say, "I'm excited" and "It's great", etc.

I suggest you skip the mini-bios and listen to how real people talk.