All Comments on 'A Holiday Romance at Sandy Shores'

story is so broken up and herky jerky, not a smooth writing. Not erotica merely slam bam next day slam bam next day...........

This seems like a first draft. There is a lot of good raw material. The story has a potential to be much better. The head-hopping makes it feel disconnected. Pat plays while Sean grows up. But the girls are stationary??