All Comments on 'A Kiss To Start'

Very short, but delightful. Great use of adjectives and description. Expand your narrative.

Really erotic, nice foreplay! Very realistic and hot.

One very minor suggestion: Instead of always saying "one hand" as in "... allows one hand to slide down her body and around. He fills one hand with the cheek ..."

Vary it a bit by saying "a hand" and "his left hand," or "her right hand."

Overall, this was a great start for this lovers' scene. Thank you.

awwweee that was romantic and sexy. i absolutly looovvveeeeeeedddd it <3

~cileena