All Comments on 'A Kiss To Start'

awwweee that was romantic and sexy. i absolutly looovvveeeeeeedddd it <3

~cileena

Really erotic, nice foreplay! Very realistic and hot.

One very minor suggestion: Instead of always saying "one hand" as in "... allows one hand to slide down her body and around. He fills one hand with the cheek ..."

Vary it a bit by saying "a hand" and "his left hand," or "her right hand."

Overall, this was a great start for this lovers' scene. Thank you.

Very short, but delightful. Great use of adjectives and description. Expand your narrative.