All Comments on 'A New Office Assistant'

"I just became you're new office assistant." *your

Not a good start so perhaps an editor might help.

Such a lack of character development and a "slam-bam-thank-you ma'am" writing. Total lack of creative thought.

Very first sentence had a grammatical error. Adios.

No you didn't. I don't work in an office.

(And others have commented on your vs you're.)

Second person rarely works well on stories like this. Addressing a female manager in an office in the way this story does makes the story sound silly. Very few of the readers will be office managers and at least half of the readers here will be male.

Second person works well as a letter to the person being addressed, but then it will have to be past tense (we did that) or future tense (we will do this). A letter can't be present tense.

Lue

Nice Flash Story. Thanks for sharing.