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"Our man," Jess said, looking up at him.
"Our man," Holly repeated.
- COMMENTS
Darkshooter2135 months agoI'm loving the story thus far, but I'm my honest opinion, the scenes are a "little light on the lesbian portions of a threesome activity. Plus the dirty talk could also be stepped up. But I will also concede that THIS IS YOUR STORY, and I am thoroughly enjoying it. I have and would again give it a five star rating, but I only think in the context of the story it "powers down the affect of the Holly/Mom character. While the son is plowing away all the female supporting characters, mom's action in the scenes is more for voyeur, than an active participant. This is just one person's opinion. So take this one with a tiny gain of salt.
P.S. I am still a fan.
Zephyrwhirl7 months agoKeep this going and going. Fun read, not much as far as hangups. They're usually prevalent in stories like this, but you cut through the crap
nippelfansmall28 months agohope will get the sister too.. 5/5
Pls don't bring other guys into the harem .
GreyBaerd8 months agoEnjoying your story a great deal! Please keep writing!
A couple of notes - when you introduce a trope like a drug to make humanity breed to save the species from a precipitous population drop, you need to develop it a bit more, since this is, in reality, very much *not* the case. To preserve the suspension of disbelief, the elements that conflict with reality must be explained in the story. Otherwise, the conflict takes the reader out of the story. Also, while "grinded" is technically an acceptable past tense of the word "grind," a better, more natural-sounding version is "ground," as in "She ground her pelvis against his." The unusual past tense can, again, pop the reader out of the story to consider the word choice. Just a couple of suggestions I hope are helpful!
