All Comments on 'A Night Away Pt. 04-06'

again,,another knee trembler,,,heheheh truly wow factor,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,xxxx

I read the first page and had to skip the rest. this story is just a bunch of rambling and going nowhere. More than half the page is about her getting dressed. Now what makes you think a good story should describe each article of clothing a woman wears. and how she fitted it on? End of page one and they're still talking. but no action. What do you think would motivate me to keep reading a story with no clue as to where its leading to. Thers no suspense, no drama nor mystery components of which make a story. Take a cue and go find some classes to learn what makes a good story.