All Comments on 'A Pleasant Surprise Pt. 01'

An excellent first effort! Can’t wait for more.

May I suggest you post the next chapter in the Transexual & Transvestite section. You’ll likely find a broader readership there.

I agree on all points of Rapierwits post. You have a talent for easy realistic conversation that makes your story even better. Thanks.

J.D.

EXCELLENT start. Keep it up.

Enjoying the story so far. Very small suggestion.... I would delete the s on maths. Math is the correct usage. Ex. Math class, not maths class. Keep up the excellent work

The errors at the very start of the story kind of turned me off to reading more. "his attention had wondered" (wandered). "Maths" (math or mathematics). "Ellie Addison" Josh answered - everyone knew Ellie Andrews. Is it Addison or Andrews? May want to get an editor to help you out.

Other than these small things, very good story!

To future American and Canadian readers: it is proper to say "maths" in England and Australia.

Awesome story easy to follow, great dialog.

Sorry, for some reason it never occurred to me that I could comment on my own stories! @Rapierwit24601, thank you for the suggestion! I've taken you up on that idea.

@Dark_Raven I may or may not have changed Ellie's last name half way through my first draft and completely forgotten to change it all the way through the story. I'm sorry to hear that it made the story more difficult for you to read and I've tried to be more careful about that kind of thing in future. Thanks!

And lastly, thanks to the anonymous user who explained, it's "Maths" here in Australia! Hope it's not terribly distracting.

Great start to this series.

I’m not sure if I’d prefer to be Tom or Ellie, but no worries as either works for me !