All Comments on 'A Simple Request'

Very stupid, stilted dialog leading to public humiliation.

Lovely premise.

Nice buildup.

Lovely description of pussy eating.

No hands or fingers in conjunction with lips and tongue?

Could have uses some extended attention to clit.

You wrote: "...the waste line..." You meant WAIST.

Five stars, nevertheless.

Your writing style is quite juvenile, and isn’t helped by the use of present tense and dialogue which doesnt follow any convention your readers can follow. The result is an idea spoiled in the execution.