by gtanya
This is wonderful! I love this feeling, aligning with joe and feeling the pursuit of a dominant who is many steps ahead but in no hurry. Feeling the seduction and building of hunger. I hope this will continue down this path.
Your grammar needs a lot of work. The repetition drew away from the story. You need to do a much better job of editing.
What a compelling tale this was! It was full of innocence, like Joe, and mystery, like the King. The bit at the end with the cage seemed to take us off in a new direction. Of course, consorting with a strange man could in a foreign country could hardly be expected to be a steady, predictable sequence of events, so perhaps the direction isn't new.
In any event, I'm off to read Ch. 02. Thanks for sharing.