All Comments on 'A Sisters' Ploy Ch. 05'

Very well done

As usual, many mistakes. My favourie was "Matt also seemed nosier during sex that his predecessors had been."

Nosier? Try noisier. That would make more sense. Also, you repeatedly use "that" instead of "than", even coming up with "that that" at one point.

"breech" instead of "breach" was a close runner-up.

Mafen’s comment begs the question - Is the author using a word processor? MS Word would have caught each of the problems that were pointed out and suggested a correction