All Comments on 'A slave's Love'

some sentences were very long, and one I couldn't understand:

"My Master watched me as I told him of my first encounter with the life, he knew because I had told Him that after that I didn't come back till Him, which had happened two years ago."

I suspect the problem here is that there are two Him's in the sentence - the first Master and the second, but I'm not 100% sure; and replacing one of the Hims with 'my first Master' doesn't clear it all up for me.

I agree with Dinora3228 that is avery confusing sentence. I think you mean "because I told Him that I didn't come back to the lifestyle/scene/slavery till Him". Perhaps it would have been better something like this:-

"I told my Master that my first experiances had put me off this lifestyle until two years ago when I met him"

Any way this is not a bad first story with quite a clear beleieveable character in the female. i hope we learn more of slave and Master and perhaps a little about the Husband and wife that her Master is training. In other words keep on writing .... please.