All Comments on 'A Species' Survival Ch. 05'

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It's getting ridiculous now.

So fucking sucking hot. I absolutely adore Cunt in every way, especially eating cunt while fucking another, some times even finger fucking a third as well then swapping around, and getting drunk on all the cunt nectar. Cunt crazed fucker, Lancashire, UK.

Remember when aliens were involved? Pepperidge farm remembers. There's zero plot to this generic fuckfest anymore.

A did X.

B did Y.

Z happened to A and B.

A did W to B.

This is how this story reads. The prose is robotic, and struggles to convey any sense of character or personality, much less eroticism.

This story is a mess. You need to slow down and focus on the story and characters. Check the grammar as well.

Pinocchio is less wooden than this writing

Agree - rinse and repeat sex with no character or plot development. Where did the alien influence go beyond pheromones? Per your beginning intro, he should be breeding all these women. 3*

Too much Copy-Paste repetition, including dialogue and commentary. The girls should get some toys. He should initiate the oral sex far more often...