All Comments on 'A Tale of Sluts 3.0'

Enough with phat and get someone to proof read your work (Mike or Mark?). Also, too many people, it gets confusing remembering all the names.

Good strong base for a very interesting series.

Hope you take it as a constructive criticism.

I like the story line but the errors in grammar make it very hard to read. Please find an editor or reread your piece and correct parts before posting. Good luck with the rest of the story, I shall await your submissions

This is actually an amusingly interesting story.

But, my man, you desperately need an editor.

Your imaginative thoughts are crippled by the composition skills of the average 7th grader. Subject/verb agreement? Consistent tense? Punctuation? Spelling errors? Incomplete sentences? Fragments? It’s writing like yours that’s made middle school language arts teachers lives more miserable for years.

Thanks. All are legit criticisms and I am in desperate need of an editor. But can’t seem to find one. Literally I posted this one in frustration. Hoping to get it rejected but somehow it got published🥲

good story keep it coming

bro need more and sooner.

You take on criticism too easily. I'll praise you only so don't be offended, ha ha!

If I could write even close to this I would feel pretty good about myself. When the story is hot (as this one is) I don't care much for spelling errors and the like. But anyway, to first impressions:

I didn't think smelling panties could be very exciting but surprisingly you got me interested. This was a stroke of genius:

"Linda laughed and couldn't stop thinking. " my son thinks Jenny's pussy smell is overpowering!!! Such a cute boy. He has no idea how a mature fragrant pussy like his mommy's would be like. He would probably faint."

"What!?" Mark looked at his laughing mother and said with a confused face.

"Nothing sweetie I just think it's cute and sexy that you love sniffing panties." She decided not tell her innocent son how a real musky pussy smells like. "

Now I can't wait for the fucker the smell her pussy... to find out for himself. What have you done to me, lol?!

I can't help but wonder if his mother's pussy is superior to Jenny's in more ways than just the smell.

Do I "smell" a little competition brewing there? ;-)

Keep going and thank you for your effort! 5 stars and looking forward to more.

Not much to it no incest 3 stars