All Comments on 'A trip with your wife'

Something called stud writing a cuckold story is an oxymoron.

When she got home, it and I were no longer there.

DON'T USE SECOND PERSON!!

I have no desire to be a cuckold, so don't try to tell me I do.

What sewer did you crawl out of author? First glance, just from the scores today given stories appear to be all garbage. The cuckolds should be happy. 1* for this trash.

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I just might of been tempted to send a short video of my ball pumping your wife full

No. I didn't.

Great. You have alienated 95% of your potential audience.

Yep it’s official we had a good day yesterday with BTB stories. And as I now noticed the very next day we get utter putrid stories what are either written by kids who have no idea what they are writing . Or writers that have completely lost all imagination and creativity and have to fall back to writing such lack lusted stories. These types of stories are more for newbies trying to make a mark for themselves. The writers that have already made a mark on this site should know these types of stories are just no good the loving wife category is flooded with these types of stories. The only thing making it big in the loving wife category is the BTB stories . And by now after so long everyone should have noticed this come on surely no one can be so dumb as to not noticed this. Even newbies after there first attempt and they see that they get hardly any likes they change and try a different category. So if you haven’t noticed this you are a very very poor writer who needs to change to a different category because you are clearly not a loving wife writer that’s for sure. So either go try a different category and have fun like everyone else and leave the loving wife category alone or stop writing stories. You need to “ find yourself “ aka try a different category you have a talent but you have to find it yourself but I can tell you now it’s not loving wife category. So go try different category’s you will know when you find it

SB has already commented on the second person narration.

And rather than repeat what I said on WalterChan's story, may I suggest that the same critique and advice applies to this one by OxfordStud.

Lue

I like cuckold stories, but this one was too cliched and, as someone else has commented, don't use second person, it's really difficult to make it work (and it definitely doesn't work here).

Consider getting an editor, it would help avoid mistakes like putting "taught" when you meant "taut".

Poorly written and a beaten up plot.

1*

Not the best written story. But I’m just reading for a raunchy story about a wife getting fucked!

I’d love to be the husband in this story. So hot to see him escorting my wife to the elevator. Knowing he’s taking her to the room and will fuck her!

ROFLMFAO

If shit writing could win an award you'd be in the running for one.

Horribly written, by the numbers, literally nothing that hasnt been written 5,000,000 times here, and much better.

And to help you out Ill fix this line for you

Your wife meets your need to be a cuckold

Your wife meets her needs for someone other than her gay husband.

Needs a longer buildup and more plot to create erotic effect, but when I came to the anal this yarn crashed and burned. 2 stars.

The shit shoving blitzed any erotic tension this story had and reduced it to another throw away offering.