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All Comments on 'A Visit to Tinseltown Pt. 09'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Your characters' conversation is false! She calls him "darling", NOT "my love".

NOT your sole mistake, but an important one.

EmmersonWritesEmmersonWritesover 1 year agoAuthor

Hm. Good note. It was intended to show a changing in Carm’s view of their status, but I may have goofed. I’ll have to check.

As for any other mistakes, well, I guess you get what you pay for. 😉 -Emmerson

EmmersonWritesEmmersonWritesover 1 year agoAuthor

I double checked. His comment about "my love" refers to earlier in the scene. I guess my mistake was wording it as "just now." Sorry about that. -Emmerson

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