All Comments on 'A Wife's Revenge Ch. 01'

I’ll say what many other commenters have said: show the videos to her parents and the courts; Hubble will win custody

If their bank accounts are joint, he can place a restriction on his wife’s access to their money as well. That would stop her from paying for the private investigator.

Great start!

A horrible story overall. I can't support the husband because he cheated. I can't support the wife because she's an abusive bitch. Either divorce him or work it out, but this is just stupid.

Me, I'd of packed my shit and left the country. F@$@ her and the horse she rode in on, as-well-as her boss and his posse.

He needs his girls and business.Too bad he couldn't eliminate the whore and her masters, but it would reduce the male population too much. Then, he needs to call his "friend", marry her and she can be the girls' mommy as well as giving her new loving husband more children. First, he needs to show the videos, etc., to her folks...

Crap

Another story about a dumbass spineless duck with no balls

Fuck doesn’t this guy need to man up.

Nice story but there is a huge flaw. Steve has all the video evidence of his wife cukolding him to take his wife to the cleaners whilst she hasn’t any evidence on him, video or otherwise. Shame as I really enjoyed the read.

Another anon said it best, the best fiction is BELIEVABLE fiction. Once things get too farfetched the story is ruined. You're not the first writer to make this mistake, nor will you be the last. Yes, suspension of belief is something that is needed to enjoy fiction, but that suspension can only go so far.

Never got this, I would be uploading every vid sent to me to every porn site I could find and a have a release in X number of days or hours and of course docing every one I could get the info on same with emails to the sites with a similar delay maybe local news depending on how big a deal the boss is too bad i cannot write worth crap good story. I think i may have read this before i still do not get his lack of action but i guess the shock and awe thing wouldf mess with one's head

He deserves everything that happens to him... not because he cheated once, but because he is a spineless wimp self-deprecating victim... not a man... just maybe the writer is displaying his own predisposition through the MC.

Never quite understood why the guy would deign to watch the videos of his wife with all the men. Save it for the attorney he would find at a later date.

The mc is an idiot and so is the rest of this fairy tale. No Mann would even entertain this for five seconds. Yet he has taken no action, just blindly walking around. He can adjust his business legally. He can arrange payments into another account. Ther is so mush that this over the line stupid.

You write well but it's a fairy tale. You should try to put more realism into a tale you script. NO husband would put up with what you're trying to sell with this story so far. Nor would a loving wife turn into a

spiteful bitch just like that. The best fiction is BELIEVABLE fiction. So far your peddling rubbish! Just simply over the top with both main characters. I'll see if anything is worth adding at the end of a tale. This part 2 stars, your writing deserves at least that. "PS" Don't let Grammar Nazis affect your writing. The story line,characters staying true,realism and how the story flows is what's important. You Should really work on being REALISTIC. JZK

I'd give this negative stars if I could. Yes, he cheated, and I HATE cheaters, but this was too far over the top to be enjoyable. Sure, it's fiction, and reality getting stretched is fine, but when it gets to the point where reality has been stretched too much, all credibility is lost.

NO ONE would tolerate the shit he tolerated, and that's why I'm writing this. Your story would have been fine if you hadn't laid it on so thickly. I'm not trying to be mean, just pointing out that you took it too far.

Cuck shit.

Story of a slut wife screwing over her children's father/husband, with her employer/pimp. LP

Story is fine. Spelling, punctuation, and capitalization are pretty terrible and make it borderline unreadable.

Probably the most pathetic story ever written. Absolute garbage.

"pathetic little man"????? He takes that? Ya, he screwed up but for crying out loud just walk away with some dignity.

Shit

Good start - well written

Guy cheats on his wife, yet is made out to be the victim... please.

It was a total waste of time reading this It was garbage

He was wrong in what he did and deserved to feel the pain and what he had lost. The actions initially were to be expected. But, what occurred from the time the asshole showed up was way over the top and would never be accepted or tolerated. The marriage was over at that moment.

Now, the little whore and her plans need to be returned in kind and the vindictive nature of her actions needs to be repaid. Oh, Asshole is Dead he just doesn't know it yet. As for the whore her actions are going to be made very verrrrrry public. She will regret the actions she took forever.........

But, going by the way you wrote the character, he doesn't have the stones to do what is necessary.

oh well, it is a well written story by a talented writer. There is only one way this story can go if the man has any semblance of self worth left. The wife is a cunt and any pain she gets is self inflicted. Also, After her little weekend in cunts position. If he has any hope of surviving to raise his daughters he needs to never touch that skank again. After her weekend she is more than likely a walking disease ridden parasite.

Murder

cuck story 1*

I would have shown her mother the videos.

oops, I meant to put that comment on chap 3. Forgot I went back to chap 1 to check on something.

Why are they driving around in the van? I thought he totaled it at the gravel pit?

How is he a successful businessman being so dumb. He had the perfect out - play all for Bill to see. Come clean with his one drunken affair with Bill. Her life would implode with her parents knowing.

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After letting Bill see it all put all those vids on the internet, implicating Darren - yup, he is going to loose his daughters any way. He needs to find a way to sell the business or run it into the ground so that lever is removed from her. Move to the cabin.

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So far this is to dumb to follow.

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0*, Hooyah

Truly disgusting writing, and for no purpose.

What a wimp stupid husband.

He deserves all the hell alright.

Why didn't he just sue the boss Darren?

Maybe he could win, if not the court, then by making the case a mighty public one.

He'd win the public judgement.

Boy he is stupid. Like most said, just e-mail the videos to friends, family, and the school board. The whole storyline was totally unbelievable, the characters were just plain dumb and extremely hateful. The whole concept that one drink tryst vs a week of screwing around with her BLACK boss (why did he have to be black?) was demeaning and disrespectful. If she was hurt so bad, she should have divorced him but she showed him up by destroying their pitiful marriage. Just plain hateful people and worth only 2 stars so far.

Not sure about this train wreck. Push a man hard enough and he'll fight back. It takes a special kind of moron to send sex tapes to ones spouse knowing that those tapes could be shown to anybody and everybody. A Judge might not think much of her actions and I'm sure her parents would simply throw her out. This story is going to the dogs - quickly.

Everybody would send out the videos to family and friends.

There is no logical explanation not to. It's a sure Checkmate in divorce court. How would a human being stay married to a POS like the wife ?

I would send out the videos to family and friends. Next she may go to the cabin, go swimming and not come home. Her boss would pay somehow, probably with his life. I'd take the kids and marry JAN and give the kids brothers and sisters...

Oh man, I'm actually invested in this. Please write a chapter 2 man!

waiting anxiously for next chapter.Please upload it soon. Don't give up.

The author is trying to upload chapter 2 but lit is giving problems.

Where the hell is chapter 2

Not bad but too many holes in the plot.

Gave it a one. Good story, would have been a 4 or 5 if continued. After a month I consider the story abandoned.

Please DON"T GIVE UP. this is a good story just keep it going and give us more of your work.

Thank you

Couldn't make it half way thru the first page because of the unbearable legal inaccuracy. It's not irreconcilable differences because once she had sex with her husband after knowing he cheated she legally forgave him, no matter what she says about it. So at that point the smug boss is just an idiot who sunk her chances of keeping anything in the divorce he could initiate right then for adultery.

I don’t understand why he didn’t forward the links and video messages to her father. Let her deal with it. Also, he should have stuck to his plan, and slept in his shop.

I will say it definitely needs a next chapter

Don't give up....Good story and keep it going. It is your story and you can write it the way you want. Please don't make me and the others wait for the next chapter or chapters. 5/5

Of course he can leave! He simply takes everything he wants and leaves. She never sees or hears from him again and is forced to pay for a divorce based on abandonment when she can afford it. Happens everyday. She's delusional. Unfinished drivel.

1 star

Revelation. Very interesting and virulent comments with ideas for solving the situation. I have a question, what is the importance of grammar and spelling for a great story that touches all the threads of the heart's feelings. This story with the author's interesting ideas for the plot is simply ... LIFE.

PS Raulmerez1 don't look at the evil, frustrated comets and please write more please PLEASE.

It as been a month ,where is Ch2.If when published it doesn't have him getting serious revenge on Susan and Darren,don't publish it.

Interesting story. Waiting for the next chapter. Please post soon. Ignore the stupid negetive comments

Good story, need the next chapter!

Set your butt down & write the end of the damn story! Please1

Not bad, but I would have send screenshots of texts, photos, videos to her family.

Burn the house, send her the video and ask if it was worth it.

Thank you for spending the time to create a story worth reading. Cant wait to read your future works.

The second installment is taking too long to get posted. You don’t get books by the chapter. People will lose interest, if they haven’t already.

Chapter 2 can be handled in less than 2 pages as the sad-sack husband guns down Suzie’s boss and his nasty cohorts. He just throws the POS Susie off a cliff and watches her splatter as she hits the ground.

I like the story you just need part 2 . The husbands revenge. I think it would be perfect for the wife to go on another weekend expecting him to stay at home with the kids , he takes the kids to her mum's without her knowing collects the other girl and takes her up to the wood cabin. They notice that the detective is following them so they put on a bit of a show not sex more loving romantic. Like spending time in the lake together lots of hugging ,cooking meals cuddling up together pretending for the camera. You could even have the private detective turning nice and being on their side and taking photographs and sending them to the wife to make her angry and depressed and sad. A role reversal she ends up becoming a worthless prostitute and the prostitute end up becoming happy with the husband . you could even have her meeting the kids up in the lake cabin and then really liking her .And which would be even better if a lot of the ideas came from the prostitute to actually show she has a brain in her head which she never got to use and she in fact is kind and caring person just needs a good man. And a chance in life.

A tough read but worth it. Not sure where you are going with the story, I hope BTB on the wife but it might be reconciliation even if that would be not my personal preference. Either way look forward to more and hope at the very least the guy sleeping with the wife gets burned. Great story so far, 5 stars.

Id send the videos to her family and friends.

Keep going. Goid start.

I agree with Schanze1, but the story isn't over I hope. People don't understand how protective real men are with regard to their children and the dilemma a guy would face in this situation. That said it's time to make the nasty selfish bitch pay in some ways and as for the "Bull" LOL he needs to be taken down!

Please ignore stupid criticism and improve on constructive criticisms. Anyway a good story,keep it up by following with the part 2. Thanks

fuck her, upload it to a porn website and send all her friends and family the web address

First of all, I am glad this is relationship is not based on real life ( Please God let this be fiction). That said I enjoyed it. It generated a visceral response as indicated by all the comments, and I want to see where the author takes this. To repeat an earlier commentator's fears. I hope the author has the story completed and is not going to wait months or years between chapters.

Unlike serveral commentator's I think the author has lots of possible ways forward. Does wife have a mental condition? Did the wife really suffer partum depression or did she fake it.? Did she fake it and cut hubby off because she had started sexing her boss and feared her cheating would be discovered. And in doing so, she unexpectedly drove hubby to seek satisfaction outside her embrace? Did her boss then take advantage of hubby's slip to push her into greater debauchery and revenge? In seeking her revenge did she finally give her boss the leverage he needed to force her into greater deprivations and cruelty? Would that explain her dichotomy,,, cruel and sadistic then loving and caring? Would any of those circumstances alter how a real man vs. a wimp would deal with his wife?

As for hubby... He spent the entire weekend in shock. Like a shark he moved simply to survive. Now having made the initial decision to stay for the kids, it's time to start gathering Intel on his opposition and real situation; I.e., who is her boss, what business(es) is her really invited in. Why is he willing to spend so much on his wife? After all her pussy really isn't made of gold, no matter what she may think and he may have told her? Her in the meantime her can start creating new accounts for his personal and business accounts. She may be able to limit the existing accounts but I don't know how she could stop him from opening new accounts she can't access and using them for all future revenue, using the old one for expenses until they are empty. Can't stop him from heading outside the city or county to find a lawyer and investigator. Alternatively, but a new laptop, for a white hat and find out house to fin bract a black hat to provide the need research. Once gee understands the real wish and not the images/story that his wife and lover are working so hard to create... Then the protagonist can demonstrate if he is stand up man, wily arsonist, or caged cuck. And let's be honest, most of you want to see if she is as psycho as it seems and if he is man or mouse. I know I do....I just don't want to wait too long.

The one thing about Revenge, you have to dig two graves Bitch!!!

Good story. It is fiction so the over the top control and resources the wife has to keep husband on a short leash are not realistic but as said it is fiction. The wife’s depraved sex with I lost count of the men again not realistic and not helpful to the plot.

Husband was well written.

Raulmerez painted his story into a corner with no way out. I doubt there will be a chapter 2 as there is nowhere to go. Wife and her lovers hold all the cards and husband has capitulated.

Oh wait. In next 3 chapters we discover that husband was a super special forces operator then CIA spook that saved the life of a man who is now US President. Fire and brimstone rain down on the bad guys and most of the town disappear to a black site prison in Eastern Europe. And the President’s super hotty younger sister helps our former husband regain his manhood and soothe his emotional pain as they raise his and their children.

Go get some help, Reading this is indicates you clearly need it.

Great writing though

So....why didn’t he send the videos to her family and friends? Why hasn’t he talked to a lawyer? WTF?

Very good story, can't wait for the next one. Please post soon. 5 stars!!!

NASTY STORY from an unbalanced mind.... PLEASE DON'T write any more, This is MORE than enough of the trash! If I need any trash there is MUCH BETTER on the nearest LANDFILL>>>

So you think it's OK to write about a "black monster" and the sound of whips cracking? Your disgusting racism earns you an automatic 1* rating on this story and on anything else you ever post on this site.

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What's hilarious is that it's really the white males who are so obsessed with black men fucking white females. It's been that way for hundreds of years, when white males would kill black men on false pretexts of them even talking to white females. Apparently, some idiotic mindsets never change, so here's a PSA for you:

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1. Black men aren't anywhere near as attracted to white females as white males think they are. Seriously, they aren't. Stop being so scared, OK whitey-boy? The big black "monsters" aren't coming for your lily-white wife. They aren't interested in her. That shit is all in your head. The black man/white female obsession has always been in the mind of pantsy-ass white males. It has very little basis in reality. In reality, the vast majority of black men are primarily interested in....drumroll, please....black women! Yeah, black women. Remember them? They exist, and black men like them.

2. Black men don't genetically have bigger penises than other races. The big black schlong is another boogeyman myth based in centuries of scaremongering racism. In the year 2021, anyone with half a brain should know that.

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Honestly, author, I'm embarrassed on your behalf that you published this racist, cliché-riddled, wildly unrealistic, poorly-punctuated, and badly-written piece of shit. This is laughable. Try and be better.

Over the top, some might say, but i still liked it. If possible i'd like to see Jan somehow end up with the lake cabin/cottage. The husband seems trapped as matters stand, what with the kids to be considered, but who knows? Even if you write it that Susie is still mentally ill, her husband can't forget the premeditation, unwatch the videos or ignore what she said. Their relationship is permanently damaged IMO. My romantic side would like to see Chase have a future with Jan but that might be too happily ever after for your tastes. Interested to see where you take this.

A very cheap story that was written solely to express a bad fantasy. All research that serves as the basis is wrong or only partially corresponds to reality. You should read the divorce law and check other things like child welfare and care, then you would quickly see that the whore scored an own goal with her weekend, the videos and the comments. He looks for a lawyer, files for divorce

sued her boss and his company and sued the surveillance company! With all the money he'll get, he doesn't have to worry about the future. Or do you want to consciously draw your protagonist as a wimp and idiot so that your story has more cuckold? You must have really strange friends and acquaintances when you know men like this protagonist.

No coming back from this one. Author may write a rec. ending maybe but it would be stupid. He may still love her but he has all the ammunition to destroy her publicly. He needs to ruin her in the eyes her parents and friends. Then divorce her no matter what the end. The fact she sold his guns was the topper for me. There was another story recently where the wife burned up hubby’s Chevelle that also to me was a game ender. Reconcillation is fine providing the wife does not degrade or ridicule the husband and put down his manhood. She did all that so dump the bitch no matter what. That has to be the ending.

I enjoyed it and await the next chapter

wasnt going to read this but im glad i did ,, he seems a decent chap ,, yes he fucked up but he wasnt a bitch about it like his wife ,, i can see things turning out bad for her ,, thanks for sharing

He needs to send all that information to her parents and see the shit hit the fan. If he keeps all the video and go to court with her cheating in the home he might get everything.

Wow! So well written; thank for sharing this. I hope it can be resolved and maintain the same level of writing!

Hate stories like this, but it’s evoking an emotional response, so that is good. Realistic? Not really. Hope that it works out well in the end for the protagonist. Looking forward to the next part. Chase needs to put on his big boy undies and take action, serious action, to protect himself and his daughters. He has plenty of evidence of what Susie is up to, and can easily show evidence for emotional abuse, spousal abuse, and clear threats of using the legal system to hurt him (all offenses). A good lawyer could get him out of this problem, full custody of the kids, a restraining order aginst his soon to be ex wife, and file suits against her boss and her company. Or, she could come to her senses, stop the torture, and try to get his forgiveness, but it would be a long hard road. Looking forward to the next part, please post it soon.

and then another for bad proof reading

You were lucky to save 2 stars but are heading for a 1 if you do not turn this train wreck around

You ramble around way to much. Clean it up.

Its the dichotomy that doesn't work. Dr. Jekyll, then Mr. Hyde? That's a different story category, Science Fiction/Fantasy. They just sent him on his phone all the evidence he needs for her to be declared an unfit mother. Once this guy gets the gonads to share the videos with her parents he will own their assistance. If he waits too long the slut will claim he went along with it, hell, it was his idea, and he just got cold feet later.

It could be good, but you are making this guy way too clueless, gullible, and after a point, totally deserving of the sewage his once wife is dumping on him. By the way, they sell pump shotguns at Walmart for $150. Given the monster his once wife has become, his daughters would be better off as orphans, raised by their grandparents. Got the balls to implement that solution? Didn't think so.

Just another excuse for a camouflage cuck story. Oh, I don't really want to write him as a complete wimp cuck, but, for his Daughters, what can he do? Oh, that's right, some other professional whore will provide him the strength and intelligence to figure this out. Hate Men Much? Or just hate strong men. It shows.

I will wait to rate the finished product. Right now it is a 3, at best. Hope you prove me wrong.

Thanks for the effort.

Excellent start. Now if it ends with four eunuchs and a paraplegic ex-wife, with the ex-wife dependent the new hooker wife, it will be a five star hit.

here's another psycho bitch revenge story. Fuck her, you can't squeeze blood from a turnip. She can take anything if theres nothing to take. Leave, take care of your kids and move on. Fuck divorcing her, she called you pathetic, send out a my slut wife greatest hits cd and hit the road. when she losses everything it will be even.

Anybody else tired of the "wife threatening to take him to the cleaners" angle? Even if the threat was valid, what price do you put on your own sanity? Of course, we have the "hooker with a heart of gold" to balance the cliche scale.

OKay, I broke my number one rule, I read a chapter 1 story the day it was posted. I hope it won't be 5 or 6 months before chapter 2. So far you have caught my interest and I'm looking forward to your next installment.

Wow that was well written and even though intellectually I know it is fiction and over the top the emotional pain of the husband seems really and I think the wife must be mentally ill.

I know men that are in similar trapped situations because of children and a mentally ill wife. I am not saying the wives used sex as a weapon. The people I know used emotional abuse not a lover.

Interesting story except it has one huge hole that would make the Grand Canyon look like a drainage ditch. All the husband has to do is sit down with Susie's parents and show them the videos. Then, with them behind the husband, any judge this side of Stalin's Show Trails would award him everything. You should have written her parents as living in Timbuktu of somewhere more desolate, like Philly. Also, unless Darren owns the company, a call to HR or any company officer would get him ejected, if not jail time. Also, any trial lawyer this side of the Zerviant-XXIII Star System would take that case on a contingency.

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Your writing is good, and I like the action, but it's hard to plug suspension of disbelief so deeply into the chewy center of a story. Five's anyway, if only just to counter the ANON and BTB Cabal.

No, end of story and marriage she is a useless whore and nobody cares about the kids anyway

Waiting for the rest.

Yeah, a lot of cliches here, it some ok bones to build part 2 on…

If you assume the wife and boss are simple stereotypes, and the husband in shock for the weekend, it kinda works. As other have said, he’s now had time to get his head screwed back kn straight, and plan / enact revenge. Let’s see what we get in part 2!

wtf

just leave

This is a very promissing story. I hope he stands like a man, and have pity on her. She's lower than any prostitute

I liked it, looking forward to Chapter 2. Please keep writing, and don't let asenine comments from wanna-be critics, who have nothing constructive to add, get yoou down. I'm hoping he mans up and either fights back or leaves rather than continue to take the humiliation and abuse from that vindictive bitch!

what he did was wrong but what she did was the worse u can do. she just went overboard and there is no coming back from her actions. i hope he divorces her