All Comments on 'A Work of Art: Renee Arrives'

Keep going please. This is a great start and really hot. Consider cutting back on the constant use of names in every piece of dialog and lightening up on the frequent use of "I love you, darling." I can't wait to read your next installment and would be happy to help edit it.

Please continue

Great story, ignore the critics. I would love to be in his place! Hope to see where this goes.

It really didn't make much sense but that's because it really wasn't a story. Not really an opening paragraph. Don't post any more chapters without letting someone else read them. This was awful.