by ZinniaX
I like non-con stories that feel more like reluctant seductions than violent one way encounters. You set up the man as essentially caring, but determined to get what he wants including the crowning achievement of deflowering a reluctant virgin and teaching her to love it. What you reveal about him was just enough for readers, I think.
I know this was a short story but I would have liked to read more about what was going through Abby's mind as she slowly relented. Simply giving in to her body's reactions was not believable and a technique that is overused by lesser writers than yourself. Explain why this driven and focused young woman, who has been a loner by choice, not by circumstance, is able to go from fear for her life to seeking an orgasm in the small time frame you set up.
This is the third of your stories I've read, and i love all of them. Thanks!
-Carl