All Comments on 'Alex - 10 Days of Torment Ch. 27'

This is such a very good story about horrible, gullible, and absolutely stupid people

Good story, well written.

It seams that the rescue team will save Christina (a happy ending?).

But maybe you will consider to also write an alternative version where Venus take completely controle over Christina (alternative multiverse), and she fully becomes Venus Butterfly.

Hard to see how Christina comes back from this. Drug & sex addicted. Physically & mentally changed. Likely riddled with std’s & pregnant. Mentally divorced from Alex & kids to the extent of considering a permanent sexcapade/prostitute/escort lifestyle in Vegas. Therapy & rehab for months at the very least. As previous commenter suggested, perfect story for at least 2 alternative endings. Best thing for Alex & the kids to do at the moment would be for him to marry/partner Maggie, as what sort of chaos would ensue if Christina actually came home in her current state. She probably wouldn’t voluntarily leave with her rescuers at the moment so it would have to be a kidnapping to get her away from Brandi & Vegas. Interesting to see Gerard’s reaction to being locked out of Vegas with cancelled airfare, etc. Things appear to be heading to a conclusion in the next chapter or 2.

I hope we get to see a close account of Ashley and Kalinda getting fucked. It seems like most of the sex takes place off camera or else gets glossed over.

Good work!

Well, like the previous user wrote, it will be hard to see how Christina comes back from this without consequences and also leaves Vegas voluntarily with the snap of fingers. She’s on different substances for almost a week, it will take time to withdraw from that and with the help of some kind of rehab. Despite the fact that the title mentions ten days, I strongly hope we don’t see the conclusion in the next chapters yet. Tbh it will be intriguing to see how Christina changes into Venus, not just further physically, but also mentally absorbing/developing the new personality eg. gestures, vocabulary, behavior towards the surroundings and when she is alone with Brandi [maybe doing sth. that Christina normaly woulden’t do manipulatet by Brandi or ordered by Gerald like get another tattoo, piercing during heat of the moment or new nails tips]. Hope it seems that we got the hint of changes in this chapter. A few things / details for consideration and that are lacking or needs clarification (probably it will sounds like a wish list 😊, but that are not my intentions):

- What Christina/Venus and Brandi are wearing, are they the same set of clothes from Sunday? (most of the time they are naked and having sex but they go/drive from motel to the club or get sht. to drink / eat even barely)

- How Christina/Venus looks like during and after puting the makeup (as a way to prepare for the work), does she see herself or Venus in the mirror.

- Her behavior towards / interactions with othe dancers / girls in the club.

- Does she stil smoke cigarets or was this only for two days?

Waiting patiently for the next chapters.

Keep your imagination going and your storytelling is great.