All Comments on 'Aliyah's Chastity Ch. 01'

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turtlegirl21turtlegirl21about 16 years ago
Excited

Im so excited and eager to find out where this one is going. I can't wait to find out why he was exciled and will they be able to be together. Also if she will be able to keep her values and not have sex. Please continue!

GlosUKGlosUKabout 16 years ago
Great start

Eager for more :)

PJ xx

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Good Start

Keep writing! My only complaint is that it is a bit scattered and the grammar can be a little confusing. See if you cannot nab yourself an editor to smooth out the rough edges and do a bit more character development and this will be a great work.

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