All Comments on 'All the Devils are Here Pt. 01'

Dark like the original, keep going please.

5 stars

You need to use all the story tags, You want to link your story to other stories. One of the "similar stories' should be the original. The first part was also too slow, it needed more to hook the reader in.

The story has potential, but as Lovecraft_Lore mentioned it starts out a little slow and even a bit disjointed at places such as Andy waking from his dream about the party. I wasn't sure what was going on. Your writing style is good and pretty-much error-free. I'll continue reading.

I liked it. I don't like Vanessa being cast as such a witch, but I like part I quite a bit. Keep them coming!