by leapingfox
Very nice Story there, I know your story is nearly six years old but I felt it deserved a comment for how well it was written. ^w^
It was tongue in cheek and very, very well done in that the author succeeded in putting me in the underdog's head. I felt his love for his lady and his terror and resolve. Yes, there were some errors, but I've read the same in loads of stories on this site. This was a wonderful, feel-good story and I loved the canine touches. Licking his balls! LOL
I understand what the last person was saying but I disagree. I think the story was very good but it does have a few gramatical and story problems. You switched around names a few times. Such as calling Rex Damian by mistake. However, I think it was a good try. With the help of an editor, all the problems should get fixed. Nicely done.
This story is confusing at best. I have know idea what the hell is going on and not to be rude I'm not sure you have any clue either. Re-read it and tell me if it makes sense to you. Once minute he is a gamma in the present and at the end he is an alpha in the past then why isn't he still a gamma @ the beginning.