by nycperv
There are so many ways you can go with this! Great work! Keep it up!
So, I like the story. It's not incredibly original (daughter/stepdaughter tries to fill in for a mother not-so-interested in sex anymore). But it's written well. The only problem I see is how long can you continue this. Does the mother find out? Does she accept it and become too passive? Or does she get over her current lack of interest and get back into the saddle, giving our narrator a bit of a conundrum? Will be interested to see how it goes. My only hope is that we don't have several more chapters of "stepdaughter blows father." Chapter 2, for instance, seemed less like its own chapter and more of a continuation of Chapter 1.