All Comments on 'AMA - The Divorcee: Day 11'

Thank you for the continuation of this great story. For me it is an immersive experience to sit down and read another installment of your story with a glass of wine and enjoy reading.

I like this story so much because it doesn't work from the assumption that the power of the app is automatically corrupting. Jay was a good guy before. Now he's a good guy with the ability to make aspects of his life better. That doesn't make him a bad guy. He shows that by being open, honest, and caring with the people in his life. If he were a bad guy to begin with the app would allow him to finish destroying him. Good or bad, it allows the user to become more of what they already were.

Enjoying your story. Still rooting for Stella to get knocked up, even though you just killed my dream.

Love harem stories. Hope you do limit it some. Having 20 women and us readers have hard time keeping up. Looks like your at 8 at the moment.

Keep up the good work.

Thank you guys for expressing your enjoyment of the story and that you're looking forward to reading more!

That was the angle I wanted to pursue with my story, that an MC app is only as corrupting as you let it out to be. It's one of the reasons why I introduced the 'Cheater' trait, to show that he won't fall down the same road that ended up hurting him just to get the girl of his dreams for so long. The original story implemented the same rules as to what I'm currently implementing and how it's not exactly absolute power, he was able to resist the corruption as it didn't corrupt absolutely. At least, those were my intentions. I'm glad that it can be inferred from what was written!

Liking the original story even though you seem to want to completely over complicate it all.

Maybe you need to create an overall story plan and discuss it with a collaborator and or editor?

Does your Jay speak Spanish? If not, maybe he needs a language app to understand Tanya? Strange that Viv never uses Vietnamese though

@JohnnyRebBB As I mentioned in a previous comment, I do have an overall story plan, but I like the freedom to be able to play around with certain aspects of the story. Since these are published chapter-to-chapter in the original site, I guess it's a little more obvious when I added more to flesh out what I had in my outline.

Jay does not speak Spanish, nor does Stella. Viv, Tanya, Cassie, and Becca do. My headcanon for it (which, I have admittedly never written into a chapter) is that Cassie and Viv spent time living in a part of the country where Spanish as a second language is more prevalent and, therefore, had to learn it. I was thinking somewhere in California, but I never wanted to put it in writing not identify the setting as a particular city since I think it'll be far more obvious that I'm a foreigner who's only real exposure to the US is from TV and movies XD

As for Tanya, she's born to immigrant parents, so she has stronger ties to her mother language than Viv who I pictured as someone who's grandparents moved as refugees so her connection to Vietnamese language is a little less (something like, she understands it and speaks it with family, but doesn't use it outside that context). As for Becca, I'd just like to think she's a polyglot lol.

Really like the overall story. Liked it better when you updated the points frequently. Writing is still clumsy and challenging to get through, primarily because its 2nd person perspective. Lastly, its irritating that some of them call him Junior when he told them he hated it. Not much respect there from people who supposedly love him.