All Comments on 'Amber's Revenge'

Some transitions not as smooth as they might be but a very good story never the less. You have taken what was a dom personality and changed her into a submissive personality, a not very easy transition in itself, not sure it is real here tho.

Ok, the sex was good, but there were 2 things that really bugged me.

1) Why does a couple who have been sexually intimate for only 2 weeks have a complete sex room with all the toys you can imagine?

2) If you want to write in a foreign language, do so properly. Your German Spelling and Grammar is quite poor in some places.

However, your english is good, your plot is well worked and you can write sex scenes that have the desired effect. Just think a little about where you want to go with a story (and, if I suspect right) leave the internet translators well alone.

Deliciously hot and the mutual sensual satisfaction is so well described. Keep up the good writing. I'm wishing the 2 "Ladies" were in Houston Texas. I know I'd be smiling..LOL "Funmischief4U"