All Comments on 'An Awakening: The Beading'

Another VERY easy 5 stars! So hot! I’ve never tried anal beads but your version of events sounds amazing!

Thanks for sharing, Tess (uk)

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Wow... made me shiver!

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Great! Hot plot, and I liked the characters. I would have liked to get to know them better, but maybe they'll feature again?

Some constructive criticism - I think you could benefit from a proof reader because the prose was a bit off in places and it distracted me from the fun. For example, your sentences were choppy and at times you could have used a comma rather than a new sentence. The dialogue was also a bit stilted in places. These are all things which aren't serious and will probably work themselves out as you write more. Really hope to read more from you :) Well done!

Thank you very much for the feedback. I agree with what you’re saying. I’ve got 3-4 stories in draft. I’ll take it under advisement.

I like this one.