by Ed0613
the lottery part. It is not necessary really, or a bit surplus indeed.
NARRATIVE IS ENGAGING WITH GOOD FLOW AND QUITE CREDIBLE EXCEPT THAT HIS AGE SHOULD HAVE BEEN IN MID-SIXTIES.LOINS HAS BEEN SPELT AS LIONS AND SOON AFTER THERE ARE TWO SOONS WHERE ONE WAS NEEDED.
I CONGRATULATE THE AUTHOR AND GIVE 85% MARKS TO THE STORY.
CARRY ON THE GOOD WORK !