All Comments on 'An Unorthodox Sales Contest Ch. 11'

I love this type of erotica. I found it quite subtle with a controlling element. Well done.

I'll look at the future chapters and do that. Thanks so much for taking the time to comment.

I too think you need to slow down and elaborate. "five, ten minutes" went by in three words? What was Ryan feeling?

I felt like I got trapped by this chapter. The story needed to move on, but I didn't have much to say. The next chapter is not only much longer, but not related to this one, so I felt that I was better off posting this one separately. I'll put Chapter 12 up for review immediately, but it will be at least 3 days, if not longer for it to appear. Thanks for letting me know that I probably needed to write more for this chapter. Keep the comments coming!

Make them longer!