All Comments on 'Anna's Weekend - Friday Night'

This story is an archetype of date rape or nonconsensual sexual activities. Women aren't looking for this.

Well written, very descriptive but where was the mind control/hypnosis. This category is as much about the entrancement as it is the intercourse.

I'm taken aback by your intro; "This is my first crack at writing anything, let alone erotic fiction." Wow! You have a natural talent! I strongly encourage you to keep writing (Whether in this genre, or whatever other floats your boat) I'm equally surprised that both of the prior commenters missed the various clues that this is, in fact, a mind control story. Moreover, I didn't need a bluntly written "entrancement." We see Anna's inner world of thoughts and anxieties, including the fact that she's oblivious to Baxter's methods. For my part, I really enjoyed the subtlety. Since I'm looking forward to reading about Saturday's shenanigans, please PLEASE keep writing, and write YOUR story, not the one pushed for by commenters.

Excellent debut effort. Isn't it disappointing that two of the commenters failed to see this story is in the right category? One thing I notice about Literotica is that a lot of readers are very impatient. They want everything revealed in the first chapter. No professional writer does that. The art is in the slow, building reveal. Speaking of art, you have a fine prose style. Are you sure you're a beginner? I worked my entire career as a writer and editor, and I regularly edited the work of professionals who weren't as good as you. FYI, I followed you because you followed me. Most of my followers haven't published on Literotica. It was nice seeing that you are an exception. I'll look forward to seeing what happens to Anna next.