All Comments on 'Any Port in a Storm'

I suggest you read your stories aloud and maybe catch some of the many errors - punctuation, grammar, non-sentences, repetitions, etc. " slithers of light" should be "slivers".

Also, it would be good to cut out most of the adverbs and adjectives. " "She was standing in the small gray painted, far too small to be functional ladies changing room at the station." You use "small" twice in one sentence. Could be: "She was standing in the gray, too-small ladies' changing room at the station."

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