All Comments on 'Aphrida's Book of Spells'

by SerenityInSound

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Not bad. Adding the ToC at the beginning was unnecessary and ate up a lot of the word-count for such a short story. It was an unnecessary addition since all that info could have been included when/if the protagonist used the spell, showing how she read the entry and decided it sounded good to try.

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I write trans-positive stories. Usually featuring lots of cum and some flavour of polyamory.

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