All Comments on 'At the Riverfront'

This wasn't a bad story, but stories are normally told in past tense for a reason. There was no good reason for this to be written in present tense, and it detracted. If you decide to submit a story to a real magazine, be aware that editors don't like present tense.

actually, I liked the fact it as in present tense - the way it could nearly have been happening to me... made the story all that much more arousing.....thank you, and please write more!

Goodness! Love the language! Present tense made it feel so much more REAL! *shudder* More more more!!