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That there should be a story category for spouses in a loving, monogamous relationship. Then the "loving wives" category would be for a spouse who hasdeUytr sexual relationships with one or more people who are not their spouse.

Enjoyed your story very mucn. Who cares about the noodles?

Erotic Couplings is for normal sex between a couple.

Loving Wives is for extra-marital fun.

We don't need new categories, we just need to use them correctly.

So in addition to being in the wrong category, this story had some issues with shifts from past tense to present tense and from third to first person. Here is an example:

"He had been waiting so long to get out their home town and just be away with no one but Daisy. He craved a relaxing and worry free separated from the rest of our lives."

First sentence "he" and "their"... Third sentence "our".

Makes it hard to read.

KB