All Comments on 'Autumn Nights'

Very nice beginning. Looking forward to future installments.

Verb tense should be consistent: "his hands would fing and gave . . ."

"Her heartbeat quickened loudly" . . . I did not know loudly was a measure of speed.

"Her eyes rolled . . . To her head / in her head.

Some very beautiful prose, however Proof Reading should have identified the discrepancies within.

The other surprise . . . A motorcycle, or scooter ?

Can't you people make a good longer story this felt rushed and is poor