All Comments on 'AVOX in France'

A beautifully written story with a sad ending.

I don’t like the death of Martin, but Justine will never recover from what her cheating cost her. Pierre is feeding the worms in a prison cemetery.

One of the most heartbreaking stories you have ever penned. Your talents shine through even with something this sad.

5 stars on another great story . GW . Keep up the great work

Okay this is my second comment which I think is a first for me but I read this again and upped it to five stars. One additional item... no current combination of drugs can make someone become an instant whore... they can knock someone out or lower barriers like alcohol but there are no Martian slut rays... a persons conscience still exists so consider that in future writings.

The wife is going to France to sign a $5million deal and yet neither her or the movie company booked her a room instead she was expected to share a room? Yeah that’s believable but I still enjoyed it anyway⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

In response to the comment from Allnighter, what kind of loving wife goes on a private plain at the last minute with a lothario or anyone? Further, her loving husband asked her not to go twice!

If I had just stayed home and gave up this dream, none of this would have happened. I

... Wow... Just read another where the guy left for work, dumping his wife for an important meeting when they had an important event planned. The guy got so the sympathy there...I mean it was work, he's taking care of the family

It's shocking that the wife gets so much hate here. Yeah, she got busy, but damn .... I didn't see anything watching the level of here. Going to sometimes Suite may be questionable, but nevertheless she was drugged and he knew it.

I liked the story but didn't much like the treatment if the wife. Maybe she should have been written to be more sneaky... I didn't know.

this story reminds me of that saying, that a man works to make money for his family, while a woman works to make money for herself. really makes me think of how a woman's money and success is like her clothes.. Soley working for her own benefit to make her look and feel good without bringing worth to the relationship, let alone the man, im not attacking women intentionally, just pointing out a thought that occurred during reading this well written story, what is a womans true motivation for working? some may say her saftey and insurance for her future, but thats the point im making, its her future not their future let alone his future, which society ingrains into men to to motivate them, to give his woman and children everything of himself and crush him when he doesnt. perhaps that's something to warn young sons about women, perhaps that's something to warn young daughters about themselves.

Justine was just a fool not recognizing Pierre’s destructive nature. She put herself in the position of being tricked into having sexual contact with him. Sharing the same bedroom was beyond foolish and just a stupid idea. It wouldn’t pass any husband’s sniff test. She was naive and failed to listen to her husband

Why do skanks become arrogant, entitled and bitchy when there's another man in the picture and just before cheating on their husbands. It was than just taking a flight with Pierre. They were working together, attending public events as a couple, holding hands etc. She wasn't thinking of her husband then. Good riddance. Martin was stopped from making the same mistake twice.

Another great story. However this one was a little darker than usual.

Keep up the great work!

By the way, this story deserved a far better score!

Damn Cindy, you hit this one out of the ball field, really, very well done. You make me smile, thanks. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

A very dark story. But apart from the stupid piece, were after assaulting Pierre, the police couldn't prove that a 6.10 Marry wasn't the assailant, it was a very plausible and well thought out story.

Ouch! - Very dark. Would have liked to have seen Justine sue the studio for the contract since the studio set her up with a known predator. Would also like to know if Pierre had been involved in the project for the whole 6 months leading up to the Cannes trip. Other than that, very solid, albeit sad, story.

Dark …… a very dark story but there are dark roads that given the right circumstances we’ll ALL travel .

Maybe I am STILL a romantic because I so hoped this would have a happy ending (sigh) (jaybee186)

Solid story. Pretty dark as well, which was a nice change. I like the touch on how Martin handled the whole ordeal as well. I agree with with it wholeheartedly in fact. If my wife, or any woman for that matter was drugged and date raped, I wouldn't divorce or separate her on those counts. She's a victim. The circumstances at that led to it would be the deciding factor. If she gets drugged at a bar and leaves because she's not feeling well then everything else happens, then nothing would happen other than me being by her side to help her get through it. However, in these circumstances, I'd divorce. It's not so much the leaving against his wishes, that could be forgivable assuming she hadn't planned anything outside the scope of her marriage. It was more the part where she was celebrating in his room, knowing the type of guy he is, that would lead me to divorce. Not saying her intentions were to get laid, but she literally and knowingly put herself in that position. I'd be there for her to support and get her through it, but only as a friend. I wouldn't stay married.

Great story, and I liked the darkness you brought into the revenge arena. Well done and easily a 5* all day long.

I liked this story CindyTV

I gave the story 4 GRADE.

Avery story doesn't have a happy ending. This one punished the wrong HUBBY.

I loved it and gave it 5 stars. She's the one who chose to go to France on Pierre's plane. She should have listened to her husband and stayed home, instead of chasing the almighty dollars and contract. All it took was a girl on a motor scooter to end her dancing career too. Once that happened, everything else was just a dream. It didn't matter that she was raped, or Pierre lost his "golden tongue", her dancing contract was all she really lived for, and she lost her husband when he was shot. It was the final straw in her happy life. While yes I felt this was a "dark tale" (towards the end), and an unusual type of story from you, you told it well with only a handful of spelling mistakes, but otherwise did a great job of telling it. Thank You for sharing it with us.

I always like your stories 5*****

Geez, your story was a 5* with me until the ending. The sad ending for all was a “Downer” even though I knew you intended it to be. I read to feel better… not sadder.

4 Stars as it was a little darker then I liked . I bet she died knowing that she had ruined a good man . I will never be rich but at least I have good friends and a great wife . My wife also thought this story was little to dark . My wife said that she would have ruined her French lover in court . I have to agree with my wife because I love her and she is sitting right next to me , why i write this . She scares me more then getting into a boxing ring with Mike Tyson .

Shit. Great story, but shit it was over the top brutal like Schwanze mentioned. I would have thrown her a pregnancy somehow.

Good story, certainly different than your usual. I liked it… 5 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Brutal.

Loved it!! Great Story!!

Great story. A little darker than your usual, but just as good as the usual. Martin taking Pierre’s golden tongue was priceless, but not worth it in the end. I suppose Martin had to die to make the story hit hard, but that was a bad thing. Pierre was the villain of this piece, but Justine rightfully shared a lot of the blame for what happened.

Wow! Just, WOW

@Sandman87 In answer to your question: Because Martin wasn't a pussy. First of all, he wasn't invited on the private jet. Secondly, his wife already told him what she was doing, and did it against his wishes. Most weak men would have done exactly what you outlined, but Martin had self respect, trusted his wife until he learned different, and then took care of business.

So why didn't Martin go over to France with her? They could have shared a hotel room. If she had to fly with Pierre, Martin could have flown commercial. He couldn't be that far behind. If she knew about Martin flying to France, then she could have stalled and met him at the hotel.

Best story,tragic ending is must cheating or no cheating she still had drinks with him had oral sex which she liked rest she was drunk it made it happen there's every karma of your action she deserve this

Are you sure? If Justine really hated Pierre (before the events in Cannes) so much, why did she spend six months working with him, then fly to Paris on his plane with him, and stay in his hotel suite? And why did the investigators photograph them in what looked like romantic settings and poses, walking together, his arm around her, holding hands, etc. How did her ring get off her hand the night she supposedly was raped? If she was drugged, why would Pierre have taken the time to remove it? Isn't it more likely that she took it off, either as a statement that she was a free spirit or because it was an expression of her feeling guilty because she was about to cheat on Martin? If Pierre drugged her, why wasn't he arrested? We got no indication of any lab report that showed any drug was in Justine's system. If there was, I suppose he could have bought his way out of it, but the police apparently didn't like him, so are they really going to obtain a fake report? Possible but it all makes me suspicious. That being said, it was a well-written story. Very well-written.

a sad ending but more real than mostwell told story

I had to look up the meaning of avox, since I know nothing about The Hunger Games. Or rather, I didn't until now. You should have explained that in the story, because not everybody would know, or care enough to Google it, like I did.

Loved the story! I don’t understand why Martin couldn’t have come along on a commercial flight and then he and Justine stay together at the same hotel?

would love for there to be an alternate ending where Martin survives and he and Justine build back up together!

the actions from simply not listening to your husband. let this be a lesson to all women who dont respect what their husbands say

Martin could have been rescued. Good story overall.

Some annoying mouse posting vitriol as comment calling this story as woman-hating and other stuff. Must be some butt-hurt feminazi misandrist bitch who loves reading only those stories where the male mc gets cucked without any consequences. What a looser!

I don't usually like dark stories like this, but it was actually pretty good.

Wow!!!!!

No prisoners taken, no quarter given, everyone lost!!!!!

An epic BTB.

Scores 5/5, well done Cindy!

Looking forward to your next story

Good story. Justine could have made the trip but avoided all of the trouble, and saved a couple of lives, by simply flying commercial, and getting her own hotel. Justine didn’t deserve rape, but everything she did failed the husband test. She put herself in harm’s way, and compromised her marriage before any sex happened.

Well done and five stars for the pace, the drama, and the ending. I look forward to more of your work.

Thanks

Nice read.

A Greek tragedy. Hubris and Nemesis. Well done.

Little over the top but certainly a complex and enjoyable read. Thanks!

It could have had happy ending how depressing

I like your stories. You keep writing and I will keep reading. 5 stars from Xluckylee

The level of drama was Shakespearian.

Well done.

It's nice to see how this writer has grown.

The plots have grown tighter

and more interesting.

I support comments urging the writer

not to let bad comments bother him.

There are people all around us

who are not too bright.

They can't help it.

They were born this way.

Others have to find a way to accept that.

Top ratings from me.

@Fjmax6 - Thanks for your encouragement. I only delete comments that are hateful and offer no context to improve. Just like the two previous Anon comments that commented how awful the story was, comparing it to Fred Flintstone level writing, and offering no advice or critiques . No need to allow immature Anon's to leave post like that. - Cindy

Wonderful story, 10 stars! Pierre got his, but Martin suffered. Justine suffered, but had she listened to her husband, it wouldn't have happened. The whole sad situation, including her missing her husband, had her finger-prints on it. EXCELLENT, CINDY!

The last sentence got to me.

There is a saying, Better an end with horror than an endless horror.

Captcha

Great story. I am a little sad over the ending but still a great story and it works. Also don't delete all those comments that criticize a story you wrote, some could have some very good feedback and help improve your stories. Do not be like Buster2U, maybe if he read some of the comments his stories would be better. Your worse story is better then his best story as least as far as scores. I do not write stories because I figure my stories would be worse then Buster2U.

Pleas stop pandering, and write something thoughtful and meaningful. Your bad girl/saintly boy formulae is weak, boring, repetitive, and laughably stupid. I’ve been around a while and haven’t seen or heard of people acting in his way.

If this was a 5th grade writing class, I’d pan this story. The narrative is straight out of pandering 101, aiming smoky to please to a small sub-culture of angry misfits, the lowest common denominators. Try something a bit more meaningful and genuinely challenge yourself, Really.

Mind numbingly aweful and just “who would do that” level stupid. For all the rave reviews below, yikes? Oneif thecokmentatirs below quite remarkably called this undertaking “ambitious and complex.” Really? Fucking really? What are you comparing this to — Fred Flintstone?

Wow. Just wow. If this is where our civilization is headed, yikes! Fucking yikes! This is hair hurting stupid.

5 stiziars!

This is one of my favorite stories from you. It actually seemed relatively more grounded, and less 'over the top'. Imo it felt more like one of those crazy dramas you'd see on TV or a movie instead of an over the top BTB.

But I have questions! What happened to Justine!? I thought she'd end up killing herself at the end. Why was she a recluse for only 5 years? What happened to end her self-imposed exile? What was her ultimate fate? I need closure CindyTV! Lol

How do you come up with this idiotic stuff?? What do you have a room full of 8th grade boys sitting around thinking up stupid, unrealistic stories to get the BTB trolls all whipped up. You’re a woman for cripes she. Stop the self hatred will ya. Plus this shit’s neither interesting , illuminating, nor remotely realistic. I know it’s fiction, but it should at least bear some redrmblance to real human beings rather than the simpleton morons your perverse brain conjures up. How about taking a break from writing this imbecilic none sense and find something useful to do? This is dreck. Reading your stuff is like the train wreck you can’t look away from, but know you should.

Go away. Or if you just can’t resist this woman hating rubbish, at least write something remotely interesting and morally challenging. This is the worse stuff on website that has an occasional excellent piece amidst the litter of dreck that’s over represented here.

Didn't like him dying. He was shot why couldn't the doctors stop the bleeding. They must not have been very good. Why wasn't he taken to trauma center.So l only giving it 3 stars. Almost gave you only 2.

I knew when they called me at noon and gave me 5 hours' notice that it was going to be a bad day.

This is where a normal person would laugh at them and hang up

I like how this idiotic story blames Justine for being drugged and raped. Martin was a crybaby who didn’t deserve his wife. Instead of supporting her through her trauma, he cast her aside.

To the commenter below. You forget that she allowed him to eat her out, so while she didn't agree to be fucked, she had already cheated on her husband. And good luck selling rape in court after agreeing to oral sex with him, and sharing a suite with him (a known past lover/fiance).

I’m sorry but this reads like rape apologia. Particularly because the rape completely gets buried in the rest of the story. She catches all this blame because a predator set everything up so he could prey on her. And it’s interesting to me how in all of these stories it’s the wife’s fault for pursuing success, and the wife’s fault for the husband pursuing success. What’s so wrong with a wife pursuing her own dreams of success? The husband was a nepobaby who was handed a business by virtue of being someone’s son. Justine worked to put her studio on the map, and to pursue her dreams. Could she have done things better when it came to the Cannes thing? Sure, but she was trying for a dream of hers. And this story makes it seem like she should have given up on that dream because nepobaby could pay for everything. Why though? Why doesn’t she get to have her own dream? If it hadn’t been for a predator, then she could have had it. But then, when the predator strikes, she loses her dream?

Like, I get that injustice is a real thing, and I don’t think it’s wrong to have it. But by the end we’re suppose to accept that Justine deserves to pay the price of losing her husband and her dream because of a shady deal from MGM and a predator who raped her.

It just seems like the point of this story is to say “listen here kids, if you put yourself in the position of being preyed on by a predator, then it’s your fault for being the prey. And you’ll lose everything and deserve it.”

Like is said. Rape apologia.

Best writer on LW.

Original story and yet , it echoes the old parable about pride and greed.

CindyTV you make me

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Love the drama, almost perfect, except one thing. How the hell dude got away with rape? If her husband believed it, there must be solid proof, and nowadays you hardly even need that to put a tag on a perp and give him hell.

The author is great because they made me hate Pierre AND Justine. Why Justine? Because she thought getting her pussy licked wasn’t cheating . Yeah she was drugged but you mean to tell me she couldn’t have gotten another flight on another plane? She is just as guilty as Pierre . Rip Martin.

5 stars

Actually it really "cracks me up" the way every possible aspect of Lit Stories are analyzed over and over as if these stories are Docu-dramas. That the author who spent hours and hours writing their story, pondering the path of the story, double checking spelling and grammar. I know, I usually spend at least 40 hours going over and over a story. So many things to watch. LOL Yet all these "Lit Professors" feel the need to critisize some one's work. They can't write a real story but they can post an opinion in the comments. LOL Cindy, just delete them. I love to do that. LOL Great Story. thanks, Buster2U

WOW - Great Writing Cindy. This is a Real Masterpiece! 100 Big Blazing Stars for you this time. Great Great Writing, Great Story, Great Tragedy, Perfect for the HallMark Channel! Heart Breaking story. What a Great Job you did on this. I have read it twice and probably going to read it again. Fantastic Thks, Buster2U

An ambitious story, far more complex than the first stories you published on the site when you were starting out. Characters had flaws that led inevitably to their demise (had Martin not cut out the guys tongue he might have survived to rejoin his wife). Things were unpredictable, yet inevitable. I foresee more and even better stories for this author in the future.

I like your writing as usual. Nice story, different angle seldom seen. Just wonder if it was necessary for him to die. The wife was misguided bit showed no bad intentions. They were both victims.

I liked this story, but one thing that always bugs me is changing perspective during the telling. It starts off with the husband in 1st person, then switched to 3rd person and floated between several different characters. This story would have been best starting and staying in 3rd person.

That aside, a good but tragic read from Cindy, thanks for sharing.

So hard to finish reading this tragic story.

But I do say it was well-written tale although a bit overload on details.

One thing I can say though is that she permitted Pierre to go down on her for oral sex.

That was truly the mistake she made that spiraled into a disaster of broken lives.

If only women could say NO, no predator could ever take a woman.

But again she was drugged, so I had to grudgingly admit ah it's reconciliation.

The surprising twist though was Pierre's revenge and that alone made me plod on to read till the end.

Thanks CindyTV

What's with everyone killing off the main character here lately...

To the commenter below who posted this question:

"If a maried woman goes alone in a night-dance-club, and then after flirting with some interesting guys get drugged and raped in some private room, who is the main responsible of that awful outcome ? The rapist or the idiot irresponsible woman ?"

====> the rapist, moron. She made a mistake. She did not ask to be drugged and raped. She is a victim. That is why if caught and charged the rapist would go to jail. What society do you live in?

Strange. Reads like a soap operas. Three stars ⭐️ for this one.

It was obvious, based on her actions, that her dream was more important to her than her relationship. So, if she listened to him and gave up her dream she would have ended up resenting him.

Five clear stars

Any spouse who would put herself in that position lacked the judgement necessary to be a trustworthy spouse to have your back. Really that simple. A married woman staying in the same bedroom suite, for God's sake! There is a reason for married propriety like not drinking to excess with a man not your husband. It's not about a spouse wanting to control you, but avoiding things which makes one doubt their trust in having your back. He was right to shun her after that performance. If you let someone come between you and your marriage, there are consequences. The crux of this author's stories.

@Anonymous

Nice story but of course the obvious is always overlooked. I mean she could have gotten a different flight, he could have gone along (not taken that guys private jet) with her, they could have gotten a second room as husband and wife. - Of course all of those options are available, but a story would not have the same impact.

I usually like your stuff and this is well written. But Jesus! Everybody’s life sucked, and they died. It’s like French cinema. I don’t expect rainbows and unicorns but I do like a light at the end of the tunnel.

You gloss over the point that she was in constant contact and fighting off seductions by Pierre for months before the ill fated France trip, Then she consented to allowing him to give her oral sex as she didn't consider it cheating. Which also makes her a liar as she swore she would have nothing to do with him. That's 3 strikes and your out doll face let's have lil sis get a turn.

I don’t understand why Martin didn’t just block Justine, Carlos, and Carmela. He told Justin to only communicate through his attorney.

I would have scored it higher if Martin had been killed in his way into the restaurant before the reconciliation dinner or if there was no reconciliation and Martin was still killed leaving the restaurant. Overall it was a great way to burn Justine in that she lost everything she actually loved.

no 5 star but still a good reed

Martin was an asshole.

Very sad, but actions have consequences.

A well written story and I didn't spot any errors, as they normally jump off the page at me, having spent years drafting and proof reading contracts.

I actually cried at the ending. That was an amazing love story in line with Romeo and Juliet for tragedy and emotion.

Ignore the Anon's. I just read the last comment that stated you faults. Clearly this Anon never wrote his own story. Where did he get his definition of Burn the Bastard - is he making up his own? He said it's in the wrong category as well - what a fool. This is exactly the correct category, about a loving wife who makes a mistake. Then he comments that all the endings should be happy in this LW theme - Why?

Like I said, ignore these fools and keep up the great work! 5 stars from me. - Kelly

You write these strong, independent, intelligent, and congruent men who are always successful, but where their spouse is concerned, they always fall apart like Soviet dress shoes on a rainy day. She drops the trip on him, and he gets whiny and becomes the typical LW male: angry, petulant, and passive-aggressive; he acts out by ignoring his wife's communication. Then, the sister-in-law, who dispenses wisdom like a combo of Abigail van Buren/Mother Teresa, tells him what he needs to hear.

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The French police would've acted on the drugging allegation, especially since it was a high-profile case, but you left us in suspense. You detailed other things post-confrontation, but the rape/drug allegation fizzled. That should've been a lynchpin in the plot instead of an afterthought. I wonder if that would've precipitated a reconciliation, and we can't have THAT in an LW story. If she were drugged, she would've known the results before being flown out for surgery. That would also require them to arrest and try Pierre, thus derailing the murder at the end.

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Also, when people enter France, their passport is scanned. The French police would've known Martin was in the country, and if he flew from Paris to Cannes, there would also be a record of that travel. This is MUCH more than circumstantial, and trials like this are handled before judges. Furthermore, he can be arrested and tried in absentia, and if found guilty, the seven-year SOL doesn't apply. Recall they did that to an American in the CDG Concorde crash. Evidence in French courts isn't subject to the strict rules we have in the US.

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It's your story, but I didn't like the ending. It's still a five rating.

Well written. But, WOW!! Could write a sadder tragedy? Nobody came out alive.

Kurmugin

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Good story! I really enjoyed reading it as I do with most of your stories!

Wow that ending was so sad. Always enjoy your stories, well written.

Thanks for writing 5⭐️

Great story but bitter sweet and depressing, 5 ⭐️.

When a married woman goes alone with her ex in his hotel room, what could ever happen ? The totally stupidity, and utterly irresponsible behaviour, of this woman caused the chain-reaction events that destroyed so many lives.

If a maried woman goes alone in a night-dance-club, and then after flirting with some interesting guys get drugged and raped in some private room, who is the main responsible of that awful outcome ? The rapist or the idiot irresponsible woman ?

So sad. So readable. Thank you for the hard work.

Ed

Some of your stories are more enjoyable reading than others. This one not so much.

But they are always worth the time spent following along on your creative path, so please keep writing them.

And thank you.

MLJ

A tragedy.

Nicely executed, it flowed well, and stirred emotions.

Thank you.

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Be well!

How to write a really depressing story in one easy lesson, excuse me while I toddle off to slit my wrists.

You would think a rich and famous woman could secure a different hotel, or hotel room. Forget the private plane and last minute travel plans.

Most poor people like myself can get a hotel or motel almost anywhere at the last minute. So I can understand the premise up to a point. She could easily book a different room. Maybe she was drugged at diner. That would make the most logical sense. Good story regardless. Thank you for sharing it.

First, I have to emphatically state that no woman deserves to be raped or drugged.

That said, I have to sign up with the crowd that places more blame on Justine than the author offered. A sudden business deal pops up, yeah OK, that happens. Justine's portraying that flying to France for the deal MUST be done via on her ex’s private jet (with him) is BS – book a flight. Then arriving for the gig she’s booked into a suite with the ex? No way in hell, in fact, her sharing a suite with the ex would be enough for me to send her packing.

More stupidity: deciding to accept being alone, drinking champagne in the ex’s suite.

Is Pierre freakin’ guilty & deserve what he got? – absolutely & then some, but I wished Martin would have walked in, thrown the flowers in her face, and cut the bitch loose.

She did not deserve his forgiveness, he certainly didn’t deserve to die.