by m_storyman_x
The story.is evolving very nicely!
Please keep going!
I am interested in where it all leads and how.
I hope the chapters keep coming just as quick, lol. I cant wait to see how he gets this all sorted out. then theirs his daughter and in daughter-in-law lol. great start, ty / bill;
That kind of thing should never sneek up on a story, big turnoff. Label if you must.
I can't wait to see if anything between the protagonist and Nan develops. Delicious!
With every thing he's getting to know about everyone he can have a lot of Pussy. and maybe set up a Harem.
see the title
Bailing on the story, too hard to keep track of who's doing who. Throw in a name now and then. Plus, it's kind of annoying that the fantasy scenes are so much longer than...whatever.
I do find this story quite erotic and original. However, when the "fantasy" is not in italics, I have to stop and question is this still the fantasy or is it one of his incredible "real" experiences with hospital staff which slows down the progress a bit and detracts. I would ask the author to edit to make sure -- and while at it, add missing quotation marks when someone is supposedly speaking aloud.
Mixing up his dreams with whats reality. I can't keep up. Also, how old is the MC???
Please correct the names of characters, while it becomes clear from context, it still is very confusing when Tracy becomes Tina, Bonnie becomes Amy and Ron is suddenly Rob.