All Comments on 'Awakening Miranda Pt. 03'

Your are a strong writer. It throws the story off of its stride for you to use a weaker writer's crutch of using male as a noun instead of an adjective. Certainly, it is a correct usage, and you use it intentionally to indicate the person is not a man even though he has parts. It is so commonly used in purple prose riddled cliché fests that it is now tainted as a noun. This story has miles to go and many men to correct. Please go lightly on 'the male this' and 'the male that.' Unfortunately, that forces you back to how to label them beyond the equally clichéd sissification terms. You're good enough; you can do it.

Too damn convoluted to be enjoyable

...I'll try to improve on my English on the one hand, and cut to the chase on the other!

Apologies if my style is flawed and my grammar incorrect - just trying hard to get my point over - hope this doesn't spoil it for everyone!

Thanks for continuing to write. Your stories are always so erotic.

I'm so turned on. Give me another orgasm from this yummy story!