All Comments on 'Balance Pt. 02'

Probably best to just stop there.... Not a great story. Someone got shot and a pregnancy ended from revenge, pretty dark choices. And your style of switching perspectives is still jarring and hard to read.

You didn't have to make Kelsey a resentful, ugly man. They could have been a hot stud who was equally happy with their new body and made everything positive.

gotta ignore last comment .finish it please

Why wouldn't he have Jason throw on another magic condom and change him back? He seemed to have figured it out after the break in.

Bad

This gives me “nooo don’t take T it will make you ugly” vibes this is bad