All Comments on 'Beach Day'

Very erotic but needs proof reading badly. Goes south at some of the best parts. Spell Check is not enough.

Why would sane people do this?

For the read.

I have a problem with the voice the author used. Why would he be telling her what she did? Doesn't she remember, after all she was there? Secondly it was devoid of emotion, which reduced it to a bland description of the action. it didn't work for me.

Chilley

I loved the setting and the sex. More please.

Cuck's by something named Trevor. That's weak man.