All Comments on 'Beau of Les Belles Pt. 03'

This series is pretty well-written, almost no typos or syntax errors, and it reads pretty smoothly. Bondage, whipping, caning, chastity, humiliation, forced pussy worship, foot worship . . . so many of the fantasy elements are there. I assume a future chapter will include water sports, forced gay, eating cream pies, pony rides, branding . . . . who can say? It would seem John really has only three choices. He can submit, maybe he'll really like it. He can carefully pretend to submit but always watch for some chance to escape his tormentors. Or he can commit suicide. That is, of course, a final escape, but I imagine the story won't include that one, realistic though it may be -- suicide is hardly a fantasy and does not attract an increasing number of readers.

stories of the type that I've ever read. There were one or two, maybe three, typos or misspellings but the story flowed very well. The conversations were, just a wee bit, stilted - but in general were well done. Thanks, and looking forward to more episodes in the tale.

I have to give it a zero because it is miscategorized. The fact that this is, as an earlier poster put it, "a submissive male's dream" does not change the fact that at this point in the story it has crossed into the nonconsent category. If it were in the nonconsent category it would get a 75 or perhaps even a 100. Please cetegorize the next installment properly, and I will rate it as such if it is of similar quality.

While quite well written with several funny turn of phrases and geniunely laugh-out-loud moments, it was still a pretty disturbing read.

Do write more.

Plot, characters and theme are really well done. But the monologues seem often redundant - the ideas repeat, and the arguments too. (Another commenter called the dialogues 'at times stilted'; I agree). ---

Generally, try more plot and less reasoning about it. The Belles do a lot of explaining their philosophy, but (at least for me) what happens to John really tells it all. As so often, a bit helps, a lot hurts. ---

I know that some readers are very much into the "I'll tell you what cruelties we'll subject you to. Now..."-device. But most writers will tell you that tightening invariably improves a story. Shine your strenghths (plot, characters)! ---

That said, bring the story to a close. There's not much left to happen (other than subjecting John to cruelty after cruelty - boring). I'd much rather read your next story.

My main frustration with the Literotica website is that your last submission currently showing is this Chapter 3 but I cant find anymore and none appear to have been released on here for some time

Please let us know when the story will continue

That the author stopped writing this sorry crap.

..because my interest in dominant women has suddenly vanished. Who knew that could even happen?