All Comments on 'Beauty and the Bus!'

The bad writing kept it from being a good story.

Excellent visuals for our mind's eye! Very sensual and enjoyable...thanks for sharing. Please continue to write...:)

Not a smutty story (nothing wrong with those btw), but a little more erotic and sensual...that's the point. Glad you got that and enjoyed it!

Very nice story, clean but also dirty. Thanks for sharing.

I'm glad the story worked for you! I hope to have more in the near future. And thank you for noticing literacy, it's one of my peevs. :)

Her mouthing 'cum for me' and then licking her fingers clean took ME over the top too - need to ride more buses I suspect. Good job - literate and HOT - thanks!

I appreciate your comments very much, I will try to write another when time permits! I'm glad it worked for you...

I've never, ever seen such a short story be so good. It was short and realistic and not the usual over the top hard core crap you see on this site. Also, im glad to see a brunette, i've gotten tired of the typical blond girl. Brunette are so much cutter and sexier than blonds in my opinion.

I got a great hard on reading this story. Thank you for this story please write more.

Thank you for the 5 stars! More to come hopefully!

agree, great short story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 5*s

I'm glad you liked. Maybe I need to ditch the car and ride more buses in big cities?

I love this! Growing up in a large city this is probably more common than you think. Congratulations on your first submission! Looking forward to many more.

I appreciate your comments. It's my first story published and it's brief, but I thought it might a good starting point. Hopefully more coming!

liked ur story, i have had the same thoughts of doing this in real life but never had the guts, but i have rubbed my self while looking at a girl/lady on the bus, in and around the city of Perth Western Australia...

hope u have more 2 cum

Thank you