by creativetalent
Any person who lets their other-half party with another while leaving them alone at home is a fool. Regardless of the slant the author puts on the story, this marriage should be annulled.
At first, I liked the "damsel in distress" theme; then it just got weird. This couple seems to immature and juvenile; and why exactly does she work and live in another state? If she doesn't have to work, why not work in the same city as her husband? It's like you are trying to give them problems in order to make the story more intriguing. Don't try so hard.
Seriously, how old are you?! This is juvenile at best and you seriously need a damn editor!
Im actually enjoying how the story had progressed so far , and can't help but keep reading. The ups and downs in their relationship makes it intriguing rather than just a run of the mill love story .Keep up the good work
Ken=manipulative, controlling, very immature
Leah=bipolar
Story=train wreck