All Comments on 'Becoming My Husband's Girlfriend'

A nice story; always interesting and an enjoyable writing style. Thank you for sharing.

Good story, try making you stories a little bit longer but loved the action.

I like the idea but it was poorly executed. Could have build the climax up more and the ending needs to be extended

Good premise and story but a bit short.

Not a bad story. I found the end to be a bit of a let down. The story could have gone in many better directions. Just me.

Kind of sad for me. Still gave you a 4, but seems like you definitely got the short end of the stick. I wanted your hubby to get roasted and for you to get a shitload of mind-blowing orgasms from other men, right in front of him. But that’s just me....

I naively thought this was going to be a much dirtier version of the Pina Colada song. That's what I get for not reading the tags ahead of the story. The other criticisms are solid I think: the twist happens too fast, and the ending is too unresolved. So much for cheaters never prospering. I can't decide if you're secretly a self hating Laura Ingraham and this is your actual fantasy, or if you're on some Mike Cernovich "bitches who think they're smart get what they deserve" trip. While I don't want to go on that trip with you, I definitely felt low grade catfished myself here, and so, you got me I guess.

I'm so glad someone got the Laura Ingraham reference. Not self hating I originally wrote as the poker buddies fucking me while hubby had to watch... But that just felt too predictable. I really appreciate the feed back.

Well Larabentover would you allow an apreciative swat on your bent over ass or would you Hashtag MeToo???!!

Good story & I really enjoyed it.

It was a bit shorter than I would have liked & I kind of saw the twist coming, but still a really enjoyable read.

The "oh you don't want to be my wife anymore? OK, you can be my chained up live in, sex slave, sex toy, girlfriend for life, instead!" ending DID make me chuckle at her arrogance.

I wouldn't say no to a follow up chapter. Hint, hint.

The story seemed pretty hot to begin with, and I was hoping for a tale of self discovery and the grief people go through to make a long relationship work. But the ending made me just as angry as the cuck stories do. Guess I am just not into betrayal.

You lost me in the opening salvo. When she goes to the motel room, lays back and looks at the ceiling? He walks in and kneels down in front of her. You don't think he wouldn't recognize his own wife? From there on in he knew exactly who Candy was and what game his wife was playing. But when he lets others rape her, that ends this crap. They leave, she calls the cops, they send her to a hospital to run a tox screen and rape kit and the men, including her husband, are off to prison. Kidnapping, illegal restraint, assault, battery, sodomy, anal rape and spousal abuse are just a few of the crimes they committed. They are toast. And she's going to keep all of the marital assets in the divorce while her husband rots in prison. Stupid story.

1 star

You guys are so nice! Thank you so much for the constructive criticism. I agree the ending was rushed. I liked some of the ideas you guys suggested, I’ll keep them in mind if I take a swing at this category again.

What happens next?

The whole idea of the catfishing is great. Would like to have a few more encounters before the ending. The ending however was much too abrupt, and didn't appreciate the rape part. Getting both into the personality split could have been a great story while maintaining the relationship. Giving each other the opportunity to live out fetishes being someone else. My ex and I would do such role playing where I could ask for things I wouldn't want to ask "the mother of my child" to do, and she could have her "lover" do special things to her that she could keep "secret" from her husband.

Take your time with the scenes, like good sex, nothing should be rushed.

Love your writing but it’s only a good story if ste wasn’t raped. You can fix that by having payback. Again good job, love the flow of your stories.

Way to ruin a good story y on earth would he feel the need to allow all his friends an himself to rape his wife he was planning on cheating so the ending just made me think wtf I liked the catfishing didn’t like how badly he treated his wife wen she was trying to be what he wanted

U ruined it with the way he treated his wife she was trying to save the marriage to some degree an I hope him an his friends all enjoy getting raped in prison if they dish it out they should be willing to take it

Very good, great plot twist, you have an interesting imagination, or a wild relationship...