All Comments on 'Been Too Long'

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gordo12gordo12over 7 years ago
Your entire plot hangs on one paragraph

""Basically, what I mean is that you need some dick. You need to be dicked down really good and leave Jack to live his life as long as he's still supporting your son. The two of you are over and you need to get some dick."

Even in fantasy land could you imagine telling a woman that? 1*

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
name

First her name is Katrina then Jennifer.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

Poorly written, poorly edited.

"Well, you know he left me and he's making it hard. I didn't expect to raise a child by himself. He's moved on and I haven't."

SHE didn't expect to raise a child by HIMSELF? Surely you meant herself?

Name change, sex boring and poorly written, the plot was garbage, when does he see his own son? does his BEST friend know he slept with his ex before? Were they married? together at the time? Guess that would be why he left.

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