All Comments on 'Behind You'

you need to develop a story and present it, this was terrible.

Sounds like a script for a perfect fantasy. I liked it. Don't be discouraged by previous comments. It's a brave start. Try getting through a book by Henry Miller the first time around....

very hot. I'd like to have seen a reaction to them glancing at each other as they slide to the floor as they'd have to see each other then. Maybe even just 'I stared into the greenest eyes I'd ever seen' or something. And maybe getting into the story with a few lines about where she was, obviously she's at work but it would have maybe been good to build up a bit more to the stranger behind her. But the story was very passionate and hot and I enjoyed it alot. Keep writing.

I think it's a good story. It is down and dirty, straight to the point. I like that in my erotica! I read it because I want to read about sex. This story fits my bill any day!